Second komposition.

[davidn]

Hi!

Yes, this is my second.. well the "start composition."
http://media.putfile.com/Piano-elude

The last seconds isn't really suppose to be there, +1.27, there are some keys that shouldn't be there, im pretty sure you can hear which ones.

I'm not sure if its worth putting time/effort in this piece, so~~ is this garbage?

If its garbage, I see no points wasting anything on it.

If it's worth wasting time on, what to do to improve it? This is the start, not the full composition.

1. Ive been thinking about adding some more notes in the start, and like making the left hand sound a bit more like violin ( or something with a floating kind of sound, not like a hammer.)

2. Audio quality is a disgrace, I'm sorry about that, but that's the best sound I could get. So please stick with it, for a little while.

3. Should this piece be played faster?
I kinda think it would,  play some parts slower+piano, then start the tempo/pace. I'm not  sure, so yeah.

4. The piano Im using isn't really that great, its "out of tune" the "pitch is waay~~ off".

5. Give me your criticism, both good and bad, I'm most interested in the negative ones.



My best regards
David Norberg

[davidn]

Hi!

Yes, this is my second.. well the "start composition."
http://media.putfile.com/Piano-elude

I'm not sure if its worth putting time/effort in this piece, so~~ is this garbage?

If its garbage, I see no points wasting anything on it.

If it's worth wasting time on, what to do to improve it?

(This is the start, its not the full composition.)


1. Ive been thinking about adding some more notes in the start, and like making the left hand sound a bit more like violin ( or something with a floating kind of sound, not like a hammer.)

2. Audio quality is a disgrace, I'm sorry about that, but that's the best sound I could get. So please stick with it, for a little while.

3. Should this piece be played faster?
I kinda think it would,  play some parts slower+piano, then start the tempo/pace. I'm not  sure, so yeah.

4. The piano Im using isn't really that great, its "out of tune" the "pitch is waay~~ off".

5. Give me your criticism, both good and bad, I'm most interested in the negative ones.



My best regards
David Norberg

Ops, wrong button sorry.

[thierry13]

I think you should watch the dynamics, the textures you put in it when you play, but appart from that, I think that this is definitely not garbage. I would not add note at the beginning. I would rather develop this first theme and then add notes in it only later. I'd suggest you to get a rather very big structure and then develop all your ideas in it. I know you can do a fairly long and great piece with this theme, you only have to develop it a lot, that's why I would not add anything in it(notes and etc.), I'd just add more dynamics to create more plans. That said, that's my opinion as an interpreter, because I haven't really been composing ... migth do it later, not my thing for rigth now.

[davidn]

I think you should watch the dynamics, the textures you put in it when you play, but appart from that, I think that this is definitely not garbage. I would not add note at the beginning. I would rather develop this first theme and then add notes in it only later. I'd suggest you to get a rather very big structure and then develop all your ideas in it. I know you can do a fairly long and great piece with this theme, you only have to develop it a lot, that's why I would not add anything in it(notes and etc.), I'd just add more dynamics to create more plans. That said, that's my opinion as an interpreter, because I haven't really been composing ... migth do it later, not my thing for rigth now.

Thank you for replying

The problem with me is that, I never get satisfied with the music I "create",
in my ears there's always something that needs to be changed/added.


 
14-22 seconds,  left hand ,in the recording. I play it 3-3-3 wonder if it would sound better like a waltz 1-2-1-2 ( 3= im refering to 3 keys at the same time, 1-2 = 1 key followed by 2 keys.)

52-55 seconds, left hand isn't playing at all, wonder if I should add something there.
(I kinda think it feels empty.)

1.11 minutes, thats where it ends..
after that im not sure if  1.12-1.22 min is something to keep.

Also, If I should put like a waltz touch to it.>> http://media.putfile.com/8-October-strom
(with some mistakes, but since the audio quality is so bad it wont matter.)

Should this piece be played fast, or slow?

I appreciate criticism.

My best regards
David Norberg