"she's not"

[larry larson]

feedback appreciated...  Larry

[pianowolfi]

feedback appreciated...  Larry

much more listenable than the two others. Perhaps you should be more careful to play all the notes of the chords together. Sometimes they fell apart.

[larry larson]

thanks for the feedback.  I'm a self-taught hack piano player who has just begun lessons.  My teacher has also pointed out my problem with playing the notes of chords all together.  I've had to loosen up my wrist and move the whole hand instead of trying to do it all with finger power.   Larry

[lani_piano_learner]

i enjoyed it and wished that my hack playing was that good!! 

[larry larson]

I chose the title because I wrote it after my first wife moved out back in '81.  There are parts of it that sound like a plaintive wail!  Larry

[ted]

I feel your music shows real character, Larry. If you have really only just started this shows a great deal of promise. The little section about a quarter way through which sounds like a two-part invention with the notes a tenth apart is a particularly charming idea and I wish it had gone on longer and been developed more fully.

Work on building an ever-increasing keyboard vocabulary of figures in all positions and keys and don't be afraid to push your physical playing boundaries or to use the whole of the keyboard. There are no prizes for reticence in music. This particular piece obviously suits a regular metrical flow but in the others you posted, which lean more to jazz derived influences, you can afford to let yourself go a bit more with rhythm and throw a few more accents off the beat.

While one should certainly steer clear of excess in order to impress, as a general rule beginners tend not to be adventurous enough. I think you have enough musical sensitivity to let yourself take many more risks without spoiling anything.

[larry larson]

Hi Ted,
Thank you very much for your thoughtful feedback.  I think as I gain confidence I will grow in the ways you have indicated.  Some of the stuff I've been working on lately has been more adventurous.  As a child I was an accordianist for 10 years, so my RH on piano is OK but my LH is weak, but getting better as I practice.   take care...   Larry Larson

[jozart]

Hi Larry,
Wish I had played this. The first thing I would do is take each section and write a complete composition from that episode. You have three or four possible pieces in this one improv. Maybe it's just the meter changes.  It keeps changing along with tempo. I get comfortable listening to one section and it suddenly changes. You have nice materal and each section is a complete thought. The thoughts are too numerous and too short for me. Maybe if you just lengthen each section by some kind of development -  repetition, embellishment, variation, etc.
Thanks Larry, I enjoy your playing.
jozart