Own composition (Dazzer) - Visions of the Hawkesbury

[Dazzer]

This is "stupidly" titled :visions of the hawkesbury.

of course, i had to bullshit a little for my assessment.

anyway, just thought maybe i'll post it here.

[Dazzer]

hey someone changed my topic name...

hahahaha ... i forgot the rules... sorry

nils must be about...

[greyrune]

Man that's lovely.  I have to say probably my favourite composition so far to come out of PF.  Some of the discords are really lovely, so ethereal.  I also love that little melodic theme.  I have to say there are one or two points where it get a bit heavy, especially that big discord after the first section.  Aside from that though, really nice.  Post more i look forward to hearing it.

[Nightscape]

This is a beautiful piece.  Greyrune is right; this has a very ethereal, floating feeling to it.  I especially like how in some places the LH interacts with the melody, kind of like Rachmaninoff.

Keep composing!

[Nightscape]

Oh... also, what is a Hawkesbury?  Just curious.

[Siberian Husky]

i'd like to learn this...its sooo beautiful...do you have sheet music readily available?


Edit: my god...im listening to this for like the 10th time straight..its like..seriously storytelling...i know thats very cliche of someone to say especially inregards to music..but itsv ery lyrical and those little climax points in the piece seem so perfectly timed..very VERY..awesome piece...keep up the good work..i'd buy a CD if you made one...holy crap..11th time now..lol okay i must sound weird now..

[Dazzer]

hahaha unfortunately this is the only thing "worthy" that's come out of my hand. Somehow there was a brief period of inspiration, and i wrote the whole thing in less than a day. I've never been able to do it again, so far hahaha.

Oh Hawkesbury is the name of the river i was traveling along when i thought of this piece. It also where the theme directly derives from. - wink - my little secret.

husky, yes you're weird haha...

[Nightscape]

I did a quick run-through of your piece......

It's quite tricky!  The LH is a little awkward in some places (are you left-handed, Dazzer?)

Please mind some of the inaccuracies....

[Dazzer]

actually... no lol

admittedly, the left hand doesn't flow that well... ah well. nothing's perfect

kudos to you though - thumbs up -

[pianorama]

Very good, I want to ressurect this so more people can see it.

[pianorama]

Though I do have one suggestion, though it's your own composition, so you can just ignore me if you want. I think that the first part (the1st page or so) sounded almost a bit too nonchalant, and it would sound better if you played the 1st part a bit more lyrically, and slightly softer. The tempo is good, keep it.

[Dazzer]

hahaha thank you very much for resurrecting it.

I'm still currently in the army marching band. But i do have plans for - gasp - a MARCH!! hahaha!

thanks again.