Liebestraum No. 3

[wayax0]

Greetings
I recently learned the music of the third Liebestraum. Aside from the obvious mistakes, could you give feedback as to what could be improved (beyond the technicality)?
Thanks

[essence]

Almost impossible to listen with all the clattering of keys.

But focus on keeping a line in the melody, no hesitations or pauses.

Sing along with it.

[eee-_-]

Please record with your phone slightly away from the keyboard , it seems you put your phone or recording device on the or near the keyboard so it makes it hard to understand whats going on because of the percussion sound coming from the keys

[essence]

It's very painful to listen to much with the clattering. But I did notice at about 00:18 the melody disappeared.

[wayax0]

It's very painful to listen to much with the clattering. But I did notice at about 00:18 the melody disappeared.

Thank you and excuse me for the bothersome clattering. I usually do direct audio, but didn't for this one for some reason. What do you make of the tempo and rhythm?

[essence]

I couldn;t hear any tempo or rhythm

I don;t think I, or anyone else, could give much useful feedback until you rerecord it.