#4. Your balanced seemed excellent! Slow down your turn so you can articulate it better. Use an agogic accent (time rather than sound) on the resolution note. I loved your rest before the final cadence, as well.
I felt your overall tempo was a little slow. Then again, I think everyonen's tempo for this piece is too slow. The tempo indicates slow, but remember the time signature is in two and you have to consider the melody and the HARMONIC RHYTHM. I did a lot of research and study on this piece; I wish I could articulate my point better in writing, but I would have to demonstrate for the best understanding of what I am saying. In other words, don't let the 8th notes articulate your tempo--feel the piece in a slow TWO, consider the rate of which the chords CHANGE, and take the rhythm of the melody into context. Too many people see 8ths notes and a slow tempo marking, and assume it means slow 8th notes. It does not.
#9. Overall, it was good, however, I would strongly consider rubato in your cadences. This piece "starts over" three times, but you blow the yield signs every time. It sounds quite mechanical. Don't get me wrong, it isn't bad at all--you could even perform it as you recorded it, but investigate the context a little futher.
Ah, how nice it would be to have intermediate students rather than 6 year olds...