Piano Forum

Well first of all let me say you did a good job at trying to catch as many details as you could from the score.  Your intentions were clearly audible with sforzandos, dynamics, phrasing.  A suggestion, next time lower your recording level or place the recorder farther away from the piano.  You may have noticed distortions in the recording when you played certain loud notes, it's called clipping and caused from a recording level that is too high. 

Grave:
Through out the entire intro you need to be more steady with your counting.  At places you seem to slow down then suddenly surge faster.  It helps to count using smaller note values for such slow music.  Eg: count in 16th notes. 

Bar 1: RH beat 4, that is a B natural not flat.  It should be a G major triad. 

Bar 3: careful not to make the sF to much.  Also be careful to preserve the dotted rhythm.  You seem to slow down very slightly in order to do the sF. 

Bar 4: the first half of this bar you suddenly go to fast.  Tempo should remain the same from previous bar. Crescendo does not mean speed up. 

Bar 5: notice if you count in 16th notes, your tempo here is faster than the beginning. Good job with dynamic contrasts.

Bar 8: Again here where cresc. is marked you speed up.  Keep the tempo consistent, use dynamics to intensify.  I'm not saying you need to play metronomically, but rather your tempo fluctuations are too wide. 

Bar 9: There are 4 even 16ths in beat 2, no indication to speed up here.  Rests are just as important as notes.  Hold the rest at the end of the bar for the full value. 


Allegro di molto e con brio:
You are playing the Allegro section quite accurately and clearly, all notes are there.  Now what has to be done is to give some parts more focus and some parts less.  Eg: the way you are playing the LH now is quite heavy, and it will be hard to get it faster.  LH is only accompaniment, so lighten up, use your wrist, play it softer.  Think of LH as shaking, and not so laborious.  Think of LH as a measured trill/tremolo. 


Bar 27: keep tempo consistent: you slow down for the p, but speed up for the rinf. 

Bar 30: lighten up the LH.  I know it seems like much more work to get the hands synchronized.  Think of the RH instead.  You also slow down a tad to do this.  Try to keep thinking ahead to the next bar.  I know this is a tiny issue, but it may become magnified when you speed up.  A lot of the tempo fluctuations occurring with tremolos, are because you are probably playing them too heavy.  Think light tremolos, and try not to tense up the wrist when both hands get more complex. 


Bar 53, 54 and similar: Just a little less on the sF.  Also it sounds like your trying to push your hand into the keys for the sF.  Think of throwing your hand at the keys, it is different from pushing and it gives a better sF sound. 

Also in the whole bar 51 section, careful again with tempo fluctuations.  I like the effect your trying to make with the rinf. and sF. 

I'm guessing Bar 84 LH was a slip.  Bb followed by B natural. 

Bar 89 and sequence: could use more pedal here. 

Bar 99 - 100: Could hold LH a bit longer and add pedal to the first bit of the bar.  Also try to keep the tempo flowing.  Some very slight hesitations here and in similar sections.  This is a continuation of the harmonic progression of the previous bars. 

Bar 131 - 132 (Just incase there is a discrepancy with bar numberings this is the 2nd ending of repeat in my edition): Make sure you hold those two chords for the full value.  Keep counting from the tempo of previous bars.  Also you could hold the fermata longer.

Bar 133 sequence (Tempo I): Count carefully and hold rests and long notes for full value. 


DEVELOPMENT

Bar 137: Lighten up LH tremolos here and similar.

Bar 139: Also be careful with surges in tempo, as before.

Bar 167: Lighten up on both hands, do not tense wrists - it will make playing this easier.  Think of the big beats (in this case 1/2 notes) instead of individual 8ths. 

Bar 174: here and similar you cut the trills short and rush ahead into the next bar.  Keep tempo steady and relax when you do the trills, no need to get nervous about them.  Play the bar to yourself counting without the trills to get the tempo first. 

Bar 207 sequence: clear pedal between each new harmony. 


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Well good job here, keep working at it. You've been very diligent at observing details in the score.