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[instromp]

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[mcgillcomposer]

Hey, good start.

What's with the C you play at the very end? Anyway, it's not important.

I have two comments that will hopefully help you:

1) Your playing is not even, and the tempo continually fluctuates...try practicing with a metronome for a while.

2) Everything is very technical sounding at the moment.  You need to work on phrasing each line more instead of plunking down on each note. Try playing each seperate voice alone a few times so that you have each one in your ear, THEN put them together. Also, figure out where each phrase is going, and where the next one is coming from...then shape the music as you would a sentence with punctuation.

I think you have a great start, keep up the good work and I hope this helps!

- Andrew

[instromp]

Hey, good start.

What's with the C you play at the very end? Anyway, it's not important.

I have two comments that will hopefully help you:

1) Your playing is not even, and the tempo continually fluctuates...try practicing with a metronome for a while.

2) Everything is very technical sounding at the moment.  You need to work on phrasing each line more instead of plunking down on each note. Try playing each seperate voice alone a few times so that you have each one in your ear, THEN put them together. Also, figure out where each phrase is going, and where the next one is coming from...then shape the music as you would a sentence with punctuation.

I think you have a great start, keep up the good work and I hope this helps!

- Andrew

sorry for deleting it, but that was an old recording and i really didnt like it. ...I would use a metronome but i dont have one,and exactly what is phrasing,i never learned what that is.And that plunking down of notes.I think you hear that because it is touch sensitive and all the notes are at the same volume, or maybe im missing something hear??

Thanks for the advice!! Sense i've been getting better since that last post,i'll try to make a recording on a real piano. Thanks again!

Instromp

[mcgillcomposer]

Oh...I didn't realize the recording was so old!  Best make a new one and then I'll take a listen and comment again.

Keep it up!

- Andrew