yes, there are good ideas in this work. but it needs more development... the opening measures are good ideas to get it from. yes, u got it right.. i think you should explore some more of it. you have very good materials there. but if it was a movement of a set of pieces (ala schumann), it might work already.
Hmm, your ideas are nice and it sounds quite cool.Btw, is this you playing? Or do you use some kinda program?