If I Should (My Own Song - not finished yet - looking for feedback)

[silvaone]

Hi there everyone

havnt posted on here in a long time - i started a new full time job recently and have been too busy to do anything!

however in my spare time i accidently stumbled across a tune and have now expanded it out and am going to try and complete it in the next few weeks

Its quite a simple tune in Gmajor (I think :-/)

Im just looking for some feedback

Im hoping to title it ''If I should'' but I dont want it to sound too stereotypical....

I need to add something to it, although I have the music change during the song i dont feel as if I have a chorus yet :-/

thanks for reading and listenin (if u did)

[ted]

It seems to me that the introduction (up to 0:30) could actually be regarded as a contrasting section. I don't think you need any more material. It's just a question of alternating these two ideas neatly to produce a balance, perhaps by changing into a contrasting key and back again, or some such device.

In fact, the first section seems stronger to me than the second, so swapping the order would be a possibility ? Then again, this verges very much on personal opinion. I cannot say for sure because I don't know the final effect you want to achieve.

[silvaone]

thanks for the feedback ted - it just seems to me a song will have a couple of verses - then a chorus consisting of 2 x 4 bars or something... then somewhere after the next chorus there is a type of interlude that diverges from the original song almost entirely (I derive this ocmment rom alot of nu-soul music i listen to - but you hear it in contemporary rock music too

Im just not sure how to go about this interlude

thanks again

- Silva