Hi Jhl... I had a good listen. It was very good...im sure you've done very well

Now I didnt have a score handy so im afraid I'll just have to comment from my memory of the piece.
1. I would caution you becarefull of the Ab's in the first few bars - partic the one just before the melody entry as if you play it with a slight delay as you did it can give the impression of being a melody note, which can be confusing for the ear. Id be tempted to move through the opening a little more so the attention is focussed on the beginning of the melody.
2. Gen point - becarefull that even in the loudest passages you never produce a hard tone. there were just a couple of spots I felt you were in danger of creeping into that. I know recording and a bright piano were against you but for future performances - particularly in octaves guard against banging...try to cushion the sound with your wrist so it floats out of the piano a bit more....tiny detail though really.
3. When the melody is rising up in the LH listen very carefully to it (the right hand is whizzing about) but there was one hole in the melody where a note didnt sound quite enough to be convinclingly part of the rising line. Listen out for this. It probably dosent happen in practise, but these things do sometimes happen in stress situations. be on your guard.
4. Somewhere about 3:40 ish where you have the same pattern repeated 3 or 4 times before you place that high note and tumble down. Think of the direction of that passage more. It felt just a tiny bit static. Im inclined to think it leads towards that high note. If something is repeated its usually for a reason so work out whether its sitting back or going forward and shape it a little more. I think forward produces more drama.
Generally you make a wonderfull sound and you crest all the phrases very beautifully and tenderly. Well done