Well done and great work!
A few comments:
It may be the recording, but if not, be more careful with the pedalling to prevent too much smudging.
Bring out the inner voices more - don't just concentrate on the top line. There is a lovely inner melody for about one bar in the first page.
Try to keep the inner notes more subtle and less intrusive.
Don't hesitate between phrases too much in the middle - it spoils the effect leading to the climax.
As mentioned in previous posts, let the music speak for itself. Don't try to push it too much!
