First things first - I don't know if this is just a practice thing, or if your keyboard has limitations - but the right hand is supposed to be an octave higher at the beginning of the theme - it is marked with an '8va---------,' indication in the score. It is written that way most likely to assist sightreading - and if you don't play it an octave higher, the right hand often clashes with the left hand!Second of all - you're not bringing out the melody well enough. The upper notes on the jumps either sound too loud or they're not sounding at all, and the jumps themselves seem very labored. The jumps are supposed to be very relaxed - don't stretch your pinky too much to reach for that upper note, move your arm in a gentle motion so that your hand actually gets there comfortably.I don't know how long you've worked on this piece, but to me it sounds like you aren't ready to take this on. I don't mean to sound harsh, but this piece requires a very fine-tuned technique. It gets much harder than just the jumps at the beginning. There are the chromatic runs and the tricky trills in the middle, as well as the intense octave variation at the end.I don't mean to discourage you - but charging into a piece you're not ready for is not very helpful to your development. Take up some Czerny, Mozart, Bach, etc. before you venture too deep into advanced Romantic repertoire, especially that of Liszt. It's very tempting I know - but its really not worth it to spend too much time working on a piece and in the end you're not able to do it justice.
Yeah, I tried this and I know it can be hard when you really want to learn a song but sometimes it's best to just leave it and work at something you're going to get pleasure out of playing, and in the nicest way possible it's just not there yet. But don't give up you're obviously a talented player.