this sounds like you are in the mood for an engineering experiment. it's carefully planned. but, you might be like me and sightreading it - for all i know. in that case -kudos!
ok. smoke a cigarette (or don't - no don't) - cough, start singing in a raspy voice with yourself playing . actually your runs are fantastic. but, smooth into this. not so heavy in the bass. ok. i like it.