A little critique please :D

[Jade]

I don`t think I spelled critique correctly.. anyways! Hi ya`ll!   I have this friend who plays piano, and I`ve been encouraging him to play even more than what his teacher gives him, and to start playing music by ear, and have fun creating n all that. Well! He has created his very own little melody, or first composition you might say.  I think it`s pretty good! I was wondering if you all would give your piano-educated opinions and critique on his first piece! Just so he can hear what other piano players have to say about it, and maybe he`ll continue experimenting with composing!   Thankyou for any suggestions/replies that may come! Tis very appreciated! Here is the link for his song:

https://evenstar.netfirms.com/short%20and%20simple.zip


Jade

[rlefebvr]

I can't critique for you, someone else will have to do that for you, but if you make a pdf file available, I would love to have it in my repertoire.

[OsseDragon]

OMG IT ROOCKKSS W00T YEA TOTALLY GRRE..eh yea

actually I would teh..*cough* creator. so. um. yea. just replying to mister above cos I also made sheets of it..though it isnt in PDF format..so hope you dont mind   annd..there are these..weird..things.. in the backround..   ah well.. its the thought that matters.. RIGHT?! *fiddles around*

https://evenstar.netfirms.com/short%20and%20simple%20sheets.zip

ta-dah.. yea..perhaps more to follow..I dunno if its any good anyway..just was bored.. and then suddenly wham. hope you like..