Hi, PP!
I think you're doing quite good. Maybe some of the passages have to be faster, but there is no need to try to rush it.
There are a few things I miss in your recording.
One is the voicing:
You probably have to overdo it in the beginning. Now they disappear sometimes, and then it doesn't sound as well as it could.
An other one is colour, and variation.
After the first slow variation, the theme isn't that interesting anymore. We've heard it like 6 or 10 times, and there are a few things that would be cool to put in the spotlight. Like the glissandos, which for me are way too modest right now.
Also I feel you play with the same colour the whole way through, more or less. Try to find diferent voicing, and maybe different phrasing. Aka, different sort of "attack" into the keys.
Very well done with the slow one in major. You just, again, need to do something about the voicing in the arpegios. For me, it's a notch too heavy. Play the "chord" a bit lighter, and the melody tone with a bit more care.
Most parts are also, for me, too dry. But I understand this is a work in progress, and then it's no use in adding loads of colourful pedal, when you have so much other things to think about.