Dave, here is my 2 cents, I think next time it is better you post your recordings under a new topic, instead of overridng others.
1) first 2 bars, one pedal, and start too slow.
2)bar 14, and bar34 repeated the same mistake, you did not hold down the RH value long enoght, I think you over sight it.
3)bar 42 needs to slow down-poco rit, you ignored it or differnt version.
4) from bar 49 to 51 meant to be "dlocissimo), you played it too loud and harsh.
Overall a good preparation, you have done all the skectches, now you need put the "colour" into your painting.
Cheers