revolutionary practice vid inside

[tobeimmersedin]

i posted this in chopinfiles just to share it as i had gotten my hands on a camera and had never seen myself play, so it was all in fun. i took a few shots at the piece and posted the better of the three. i asked that it not be critiqued because i knew of the noticable "troubled areas" and i just wanted to contribute. however on second thought i figure that since i can almost play it, it may be best to hear some honest feedback while i work on polishing it. so now i turn to the piano forum.

im not going to mention where i think it needs help ill give you all free reign to go nuts. i will say that i just started learning the ending tho...i know its a mess.

as far as added disclaimers are concerned im self taught with no lessons ( understandibly, im sure its in my best interest to get them, but i wont and wont bore you with the reasons ) and have been playing for about a year and 10 months..thank you so much for taking the time out to watch this and to comment!!! it really is appreciated!xXx!

love from brandon

www.geocities.com/xdigitalxrainx/video/practice_revolutionary.wmv

[mound]

you've got some fast fingers my friend!

I know you don't want to hear it, but I think you really should get a teacher who can teach you all about arm weight, tone and expression.   This sounds very "surfacy", sterile and agitated to me. It's entirely lacking in dynamics. (no offense, you asked  I also see TONS of motion in your arms and wrists (what I can see of them at least) thats just wasting energy that could go into your tone. It looks like everything is coming from your fingers and wrists. 

The notes are all there (almost, you're aware of the trouble spots though) but like I said, the most important aspects of this piece are all missing as far as I'm concerned, and if you're not willing to get a teacher well then, I'm not sure what to tell you. The stuff you need to learn to perform this piece well can't really be taught in a forum.. (note, I can't play this piece. I've never tried, but it is one of my favorites, and I have listened to it countless times through the years.) It would take me a considerable amount of time, this is one of those pieces you could be working on for years, so don't feel bad..) I just think you're doing yourself a disservice if you don't seek some instruction. You could be amazing!


oh, ps. check out the quote at the bottom of any one of Bernhard's posts 

-Paul

[tobeimmersedin]

this is wot im talking about....keep it coming!! ill reply in depth later after i process everything, but thanks for taking time out to write and critique.

ill look up that quote as well...ive read alot of wot berhnard has written and like everyone else i think hes an astounding individual. i hope to hear his reply.xXx!

love from brandon

[Sketchee]

It always sound harsher to me when someone starts off a post with "This might sound harsh" or "This isn't what you want to here"  Just one of those wierd Seinfieldian nonsequitor thoughts I was having  

Anyway, more emphasis on the dynamics would improve the performance.  The etude in this piece is really in the right hand: controlling the chord dynamics, voicing and the movement on the melody while still maintaining the more complex right hand with it's own movement and dynamics. Just my thoughts.

[mound]

It always sound harsher to me when someone starts off a post with "This might sound harsh" or "This isn't what you want to here"  Just one of those wierd Seinfieldian nonsequitor thoughts I was having  

I specifically said "this isn't what you want to hear" rather than "this might sound harsh" (which I wouldn't have said regardless) only because he said

im sure its in my best interest to get them, but i wont and wont bore you with the reasons

But I don't think he was put off by it, he said this is what he was looking for.

-Paul

[tobeimmersedin]

thank you both for your honest feedback...im going to spend a good amount of time polishing it and focusing on the dynamics. ive gotten some helpfull criticism from a few others as well, and will re post the video when i feel its at a respectible level!xXx!

love from brandon