Schubert was an amazing composer and it takes a real musician to render his music gracefully on the piano.
I think you've done a fine job. I particularly like the fact that you play with the score. You have some lovely, lyrical tone going on.
Personally, I think if the LH could have better contact with the keys it could support the sound texture more effectively, and give your playing more advanced colour. More colour would allow you to achieve a more organic, expressive quality.
But really, this was some very musical, highly accomplished playing. Schubert is always extremely difficult to play.
Do you have some good tips how to get closer to the keyboard?