Congratulations on getting this extremely challenging work under your belt! Overall, you have a fine sense of style developing here. A few places need a bit more work, from a housekeeping perspective (the development and the final page, for instance). You have some good articulation, but in general the melody could sing with more legato and the accompanying material could be a bit less clunky. One thing that will help you stylistically is to really emphasize the dissonance on the appogiatura more, rather than playing the resolving consonance so loudly. Fine work! I'd love to hear this one again when you've performed it a few more times.
[...] get some input and see where I need to work. Be honest and be sure to tell me both POSITIVES and NEGATIVES.
How helpful any comments in this thread will be depends on what this audition is for. Is this piece planned for the competition in February, or are you merely showing us a stage in your development?
Well I'm looking for your opinion in both the facts that this piece is a stage in development and it is being prepared for a competition. The competition winners perform in Carnegie Hall so the feedback related to the competition will probably be more direct. If you could give your opinion on my development and your opinion on what it needs for a competition that would be really helpful!