Good job, David! I can tell that you have worked hard to polish this piece to a high performance standard, and you have achieved a high level of technical accuracy.
Overall, the rhythmic structure could be expressed with greater clarity. I think it should have more intensity, and less vagueness. Or in other words, don't interrupt the story for the sake of taking the audience into a dream, no matter how pretty the dream world can seem.
Your coda, in my opinion, was over-pedaled. Greater clarity of touch would have made the ending more exciting.
Be careful that your lovely, expansive style of rubato doesn't stray into the realm of self-indulgence by obscuring the musical structure of the work!