That sounds a lot more palatable indeed. Still not very nice though, you poor old grand just does not have the tone and sonority for it.
I've never played this piece so I don't know if it is anywhere near as hard as it sounds; I guess as a whole it may not be, though some passages seem pretty devilish.
I did not hear any real problems, just many places where you still need to build enough confidence to take risks.
Listening with score it seemed to me you do not quite observe many of the different staccati and sforzandi, and dynamic contrasts should be much more extreme. I'm not sure how well the piece works in its solo version - it seems to go on a bit and I find the closing bars quite disappointing. Is this Liszt's own version ?