original composition

[whatthefuck389]

Hello ,

This is a little piano piece that I made myself .
I would love to get some feedback
Tell me what you think !

[stevensk]

Nice little popish piano piece! I suggest that you tune your piano.  Anyway, nice little piece 

[dogperson]

I don't understand the sudden change in dynamics between measures in the last section, nor the arpeggio at the end.  Thematically, think about what you are trying to say... does the fog come back in at the end?  If yes, eliminate the loud arpeggio and replace with something that fades out?  If it clears, what is the basis for the dynamic at about 1.02 where there is one measure of forte, followed by about one of pianissimo?   My disclaimer is that I am an adult returning student, so you can take this with the proverbial grain of salt...   just an impression.

[roncesvalles]

The music was, on the whole, solid for pop music.   You're basically using the same four chord progression over and over, so your only option is to get more and more elaborate with your right hand figuration (which you did, accelerating with smaller note values, and then moving on to thirds).   Your next task should be writing something like this, but having a "middle" section with a different chord progression.   This will make it feel as if there's more going on, and if you can connect the middle section back to the original chord progression, then there will be more excitement in returning to the original progression.   Also, the ending came off a bit quizzical.  Why did you end it on that chord?  It feels as if you tried to make up for a lack of a cadence with a flourish down the keyboard. 

What I would recommend would be to play some classical pieces.   What chords are they using?   How do the melodies relate to the chords, and how do they lead to the next chord?   An introductory book on harmony would also be helpful, but really, it depends on what sort of music you're trying to make.   If you want to make pop music, it might be helpful to study artists who you respect or whose sound you would, at first, like to emulate.

[suoyung]

I wouldn't name this original composition... If you know what I mean :/ It is not bad as a soundtrack for a romantic film...(also it reminded me the soundtrack from Twilight, don't remember the title of the composition, though). But I really didn't like it... I agree with upper comment about how can you make your compositions more interesting. But it will be more interesting in that romantic style, again. I advice you to leave that style :/ But is your own business, of course. I think many people will like this, really.