Dream of night - my own polyphonic piano composition

[stylerpiano]

Dear everybody!

Today I sit down to my piano and composed my first polyphonic piano piece/composition, I gave the "Dream of night" name to it.

 I uploaded the score here. Could you please give me some advice, how can I improve it if it's neccesary? If it's ready I will play it by myself, it's just the notation software and my piano at the moment.

[dogperson]

I am not a composer, So this is probably worth less than a grain of salt but I’ll share it anyway

I would recommend adding some more variety: maybe a section in a minor key, maybe a section with the melody in the bass. 

[stylerpiano]

Oh, the melody in the bass is a very good idea, I will extend it with a section in that way (probably replace one of the repeated section). Thanks

[ted]

Oh, the melody in the bass is a very good idea, I will extend it with a section in that way (probably replace one of the repeated section). Thanks

The melodic phrases are very attractive, and  tended to outweigh any polyphonic considerations for me. Being a sucker for momentary impulse I am largely oblivious to form at the best of times so perhaps I am best ignored. Nonetheless that was my reaction.

[stylerpiano]

The melodic phrases are very attractive, and  tended to outweigh any polyphonic considerations for me. Being a sucker for momentary impulse I am largely oblivious to form at the best of times so perhaps I am best ignored. Nonetheless that was my reaction.

Thank you Ted for your comment. 

[stylerpiano]

By the way I will put the piece into Db major, but keep the same notes (just to hide the lots of sharp) 

Db major version: https://lebersoftware.hu/wp-content/uploads/2020/06/Dream_of_night_Laszlo_Leber_DbMajor.pdf?fbclid=IwAR282NRDGrHs-7xyGoloyLXQVYWQvI9qbAD_k9qHWr4xArmQ2IHYX69zKws

[8opus]

That's pretty nice. I would say, maybe try to let the melody carry you toward a bigger, more emotional climax. Give to the piece a high point that will make people want to come back to it. It can be a discreet one if you don't want to transform your piece too much. It doesn't need to be loud.