Hey 32 -
The problem with your suggestion is that you have the hands hitting together on crucial LH beats, which loses the heard impression of a polyrhythm.
It will be noticeably lost.
In my description, I acknowledged that it wasn't exact, (and did offer a glimpse of how to adjust in my second description, suggesting that a few RH notes would be seen as grace notes : "This is not exact, but very close to the polyrhythm. To describe in further detail, one would have to see a couple of RH notes as grace notes to the LH part instead, and can be hard to switch perspectives a few times in the flow. So at first, I have my students
approach this sort of polyrhythm as I first described."
But my first description this gets the ball rolling. Then an adjust can be made.
Also, I would posit that because the passage is to be played at such a quick speed,
that to the ear, my second description (with a couple of RH grace notes) would sound the same - identical to playing all LH (except the first beat) as grace notes. At a slower speed, of course, that would not be true - and my second description would need to be worked in. Does that make sense?
Again, if the LH is played with the RH notes, the staggered effect of the polyrhythm is completely lost.
PS. "3(e-g#)+3(a-c)+2(d-e)+4(f#-b) +2(c-d)."
Your description of my calculation - is lacking the calculation for the fact that each LH beat is worth 2.8 of the RH notes. I believe the placement of the LH notes - where I put them - is where they would fall.
BTW - in your last calculation - "+2(c-d)" you are missing the the added space from D to E - to the main beat.
In you third calculation "+2(d-e)" if the RH played a grace note on the C to the LH D, then the continuity is preserved. But the placement of the LH would be in the same place , between C and D in the RH as in my first calculation. As I said, it could be adjusted a bit, but at this speed, only the LH placement in between the RH notes is all that is needed to create the effect- musically.
One modification: (correction) the D# in the LH as a grace note to the RH G - in other words, played just after th RH F#. My apologies. (the pdf upside-down notwithstanding).
Thanks for bringing this to my attention, 32.!