Smokey-ish jazzy blues piece

[coca cola veins]

I've got to be honest here, this improvisation is actually rather dull, manly resolving around a steady i - VII - VI - v/V progression with some random melody lines above it. Very... cliché. Therefore I will ask you for feedback (if I get any this time ) purely concerning the actuall playing - i.e - what is the first thing a experienced piano player like yourself ( ) would do better, or if you like, what part of my playing stinks (the most...)?

I've been playing for 7-8 month without a teacher (I really can't get one right now) and thats why your feedback would be so much appreciated, since all feedback I ever get is from piano hating Oasis fans... If you now what I'm saying. I have never once been given any real, constructive feedback in my life. 

And as you will hear, it's not a piano being recorded but a 61 key keyboard through a free soundfont, hope you don't mind. And if you notice some awkward moments of silence in the piece its because I don't have a pedal.

Very well, enjoy, i guess.