NO body can comment because THe sound is painful like twitching a styrofoam
As far as I can hear (being no voice expert of course) you are singing sometimes a bit low. And in the forte parts you seem to force your voice too much, sounds like you use too much pressure. The intonation thing is not really a big deal and I think it can be corrected easily. The problem with pressure or forcing the voice in the forte parts you should probably tackle together with your voice teacher.
It's not really low for me..It might just be the song...I can definitely sing lower than that...
I was talking about the intonation
Oh. Right...I get it now..Sorry for the confusion..I've been tired today..
But anyway, as I said, I think this is not a big deal.