VIDEO: Feedback on an original piece - Nocturne by Dorian Modelo

[dorianmodelo]

Would love to get feedback on this piece.  Guitarist composing on piano...  Thanks in advance!

[omar_roy]

What I'm hearing is as follows:

Chord - Meandering notes - Chord - More meandering notes - and so on and so forth.

What you've done is establish a good framework to expand on.  What you need to do is flesh it out.  Give the right hand a line and direction rather than just meandering around a few notes, so that the right hand sort of pulls us towards the next chord.  After that, you can flesh out the left hand by breaking the chords or arpeggiating them, or arranging them in some sort of accompaniment that you fancy.

All in all, a fine groundwork to build the rest of your work on, and I urge you to keep working on it.

[dorianmodelo]

Thanks omar_roy!  Understood...  My attempt of less is more was maybe taken a bit far.  I will dabble with the suggestion to see where it takes me.