Wow. what an improvement from the first time. It's ready now for a competition.
The tempi are exactly what I feel. Just one thing in the prelude. It's very articulate and very well executed. But I'm not aware of the harmonic progression. I just don't feel it. Do you? I would go through it a few times with just the chords and let yourself go. Do crazy things if you want. Crescendi, diminuendi, accelerandi, etc. But make that harmonic progression felt. Because that's all this piece is. Harmony. Play it grandly like an organ prelude if you want. Roll the chords, add big bass octaves, etc. Then, when you really get it inside yourself, go back to the original version and see what happens.