It's very beautiful, but as pianowolfi said, the technical challenges are not quite yet overcome. If I could make one observation, it would be that the RH seems to be in command of the melody; i.e., the technical challenges posed by the sixteenth-note figuration, not yet conquered, are distorting the shaping, direction, and intention of the melody, rather than supporting it.
This does not contradict what pianisten1989 said, however -- you just need to learn to have control of both, hear both, and then put the LH in the driver's seat.
All best,
Mike