Hi - a very nice effort. Several things, of course you know this would sound nicer where your piano more in tune. A general comment. Try and relax your right hand more. Just looking at the video it seemed tense even in areas when it wasn't doing to much.
Lets see, Look where the andante begins. At about 1:21 of the recording each of those little three note patterns in the right hand that have rest signs for the left hand need to be very clear. NO sound reverberating under the melody. Next at about 1:31 you have the right hand playing a three note pattern going down ending on a quarter note, then a new phrase going up. This phrase going up is an answer to the first pattern going down. It needs to be clearly demarcated. At 1:39 there is to much of a break repeated several times.
Hope all of that made sense. Like I said a very nice job. Its the little things though that will put this piece over the top. Keep posting, playing, and progressing.
Kelly