Hey there, nobody replied so far so probably no suggestions. I d say it could be even better i the tempo was more evene within the parts, it could be played lighter in general too. You can show more contrast in dynamics, as per the markimgs on the sheet music, for instance when your assending appregios im right hand start, it should be pp and gradual increase in volume, then the opposite on the descend. My opinion.

good job thou, sounds fab given the acoustical environment

have a look at my version, may be you will find something youseful, may be not, it surely doesnt sound as impressive, a cheap digi piano in a small room he he