Vine Sonata No. 1- Listen and Critique?

[pianosaremusic]

This piece was pretty challenging to me since I'm not really into contemporary compositions. However, this piece caught my eye, and it's been my favorite contemporary piece so I decided to learn it. I recorded it at home so excuse the out of tune notes =.=

Any tips or criticism would be greatly appreciated! Thanks!

[rachmaninoff_forever]

Omg I LOOOVVVEEEE Carl Vine!!!

I would critique you, but I'm not well versed in contemporary music, so...  Sorry.

Actually, there is this one spot...

Right after the first forearm cluster, right around when you're screwing around with the really LOW register, there's a hidden melody that I can't hear.  Try to bring it out more. 

[theholygideons]

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[theholygideons]

I think you wait too long after the initial glissando, kinda sounds disjointed between the 2 sections. You could take longer the second time it appears.
just my opinion, I don't play contemporary either.