My composition

[sean528]

hi, I am a self-learner who s been playing the piano for quite some time. I have always been interested in composition, and I started really doing it not long ago and I would love to know more people like me. Here's some of my compositions i would like to share with you guys. I hope you enjoy it. 

In the starry rose sky

Frozen planet

Ripples

[faulty_damper]

You could improve the sound by learning to pedal better.  Currently, it's up-down on the dampers which causes an abrupt clunk of stopped motion.  Instead, pedal to achieve gentle muting with each harmonic change.

[tiboo]

Hi !
I don't understand why most of self taught musicians keep shouting on from the rooftop that they have this gift, I find it too blinky and self centered.I learnt to play the piano by myself and i dont' make a fuss : humility is not the dirt you can find on the walls ! Actually I decided to take piano lessons with a teacher, and also to meet a professor specialized in composition "at the concervatoire de Grenoble" because i think we always have to learn more.
By the way the sound is creepy buy a microphone to make correct recordings.
Concerning the compositions it would be not so bad if it was improvisations !
But keep going and work !!
Bon courage !
(Don"t take it too badly I'm a little bit angry tonight but fed up with this kind of recording who are proliferating  on YT with a such bad sound)

[tiboo]

I did'nt want to hurt you but as I said, I'm angry tonight about a story of lost of something. And we can't always saying we love each other. Some times "se tirer la bourre" (I don't know the words in english) is good when it's well argued.
So please do not hesitate to argue !

[sean528]

I don't understand how you came up those thoughts that I am shouting up the rooftop.....etc
I simply had crappy teachers and that s why I resulted in self-learning. And by self-learning, it doesn't mean that I don't read less or listen to less recordings than other people who s with a teacher. Also, it doesn't mean that I ve stopped learning already, infact, I always think there s sth I can do better. And btw, I have passed my LTCL exam years ago.

Thanks for the comments about the sounding, technique and stuff, but when I would be very much appreciated if I can hear comments related to the composition itself.

[faulty_damper]

You didn't ask about what we thought of your compositions.  But if you can take a hint, there's a reason why I only mentioned the technical aspect.

Compositionally, the music lacks texture.  Voices are missing which makes it sound hollow; e.g. Frozen Planet had an incredible amount of hollow 5ths.  If these were improvised, then that would be fine because improvised pieces aren't expected to be of high compositional quality.

Musical ideas are fine but they need better development.

[johnyprestige]

I really enjoyed your compositions/playing. It reminded me of the music out of the Final Fantasy video games. I love your music. I would love to hear more from you!