Melodie - Original composition

[francoisfj]

Hello, I am new to this forum, though I have been reading for some time.

This is an original composition of mine, played by logic pro X, any criticism (good or bad) would be very appreciated

The link to the piece:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eidSmi_f87g

Thank you very much

[pianoguy711]

Hi  ,

Would love to hear how the piece sounds by your own hands!  MIDI playback kind of robs the composition of any pianism, expression, or dimension.  That being said I had a hard time latching on to a melody, despite the piece's name.  There's a lot of modulations and time signature changes, so the piece is lacking cohesion.  Work on the form so the listener knows "where they are".  Also you use a lot of dotted-sixteenth notes in succession.  If you are trying to achieve syncopation, try using tuplets instead.     Thanks for sharing. 

[francoisfj]

Thank you for the feedback! it's very appreciated
I agree with you, especially about the melody changes, that's what my piano teacher keeps telling me, as well, the doted 16th! I will change it then
I am going to play it in the little student concert at my university, it's just that I need to practice it for some time before I can actually play it :/