Candy Sky Fall - Beginner needs a help :)

[0ahpla1]

Hi, I've been practicing piano for a couple of months and I would like to hear your feedback on my improvised track called Candy Sky Fall. I'm curious about what are the most noticeable mistakes I am making and also what can I do to eliminate them. Any form of feedback is appreciated. Thank You, link below:

 https://soundcloud.com/juraj-chobot/candy-sky-fall?si=6d18a92d943b46c4a132037a3f6e50c2

[ted]

I listened to your playing and found it pleasant. Only you can assess "mistakes" when it comes to the creative aspect. If you are trying to sound like an established genre, somebody else or music of the past then "mistakes" would presumably mean failure to achieve the imitation to a reasonable degree. However with your own work it is more a case of asking yourself if the result is interesting to you, whether it pleases or surprises you, whether it will stand repeated listenings, whether you have broken new ground or whether a priori intention, if such existed, has been fulfilled. 

[lostinidlewonder]

I think improvisations don't really have mistakes as such. One thing I noticed from your work is that I can skip around randomly and whatever comes will sound correct. It seems like a generic pattern where you merely go through permutations and no matter what you do it will generally not encounter any issues. Personally I enjoy improvising with all sorts of weird things happening, break the music and try to bring it back to some sort of order. So if pressed to reveal any mistake I guess it would be to try and make more mistakes in your improvisations

[quantum]

As ted and lostinidlewonder mention above, it is somewhat elusive to identify mistakes in a form that affords the musician much creative licence. 

Your improvisation provided a consistent feel, and nothing really stood out as being out of place.  If you were looking to expand your palette, experiment with using the entire range of keys on the instrument.  Investigate what you can do in the various ranges of the piano. 

So if pressed to reveal any mistake I guess it would be to try and make more mistakes in your improvisations

It is often through the mistakes where we can become aware of creative potential.

[lostinidlewonder]

It is often through the mistakes where we can become aware of creative potential.

Totally agree. I think this is something that spills over into philosophy of life itself. If we are not ever taking risks and taking responsibility for failure in search for something great what do we miss out on?