Wow, don't you love having these dour-looking people sitting there with scores in hand?!

Anyway, I thought you did very well.
The recording and the piano were not the best, so your articulation was hard to appreciate.
I think you did well on the outer sections, and you need to work on the fluidity of the lyrical section in the middle. More legato and phrasing of the RH melody, and a lot more smoothness is needed in the LH arpeggios. Toward the end it seemed like you just wanted to get through it (nerves!), so you missed some expressiveness. (Not to criticize you too much, as I myself would have been a nervous wreck.)
Keep up the good work, and have fun!
Teresa