I've only listened to the pedal version.
Speed: Inconsistent in the beginning and the end, could have slowed down more particularly during the end to create dramatic effect. Good speed however.
Expression: generally not bad. Bring out the melody just a little more and try to supress the right hand a little more, and maybe shape it a little. Good attempt at melodic shaping. one thing I like about your playing: I think you utilized some rubato.

Just do slow practice with full expression and maybe even hands seperate with expression.
BTW I like this etude A LOT and hope to learn it in 10 years or less.