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Offline roseamelia

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Have you ever made a poem before?
« on: January 28, 2012, 04:43:59 AM »
I have two but I'll only do one.

Children play

As the children play and play.
As their swings whirl and sway.
As the children chatter away.
They bring their lunch on a tray.
Out in the park where the children play.
But Jesus looked at them and said "With man this is impossible, but with God ALL things are possible!"<br /><br />~Jesus Matthew 19:26

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #1 on: January 28, 2012, 05:07:20 AM »
Yes, it was some trash I made up.

Anna Maria from France
Who hated to sing and dance
She danced ahead
 smashed her head
and set fire to her pants.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #2 on: January 28, 2012, 05:56:55 AM »
More trash...

There was a young bard from Japan
Whose limericks never would scan
When told this was so
He replied 'yes I know
but I make a point of getting just as many words into the last line as I possibly can'.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #3 on: January 28, 2012, 06:51:42 AM »
How old are you?

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #4 on: January 28, 2012, 07:36:18 PM »
  ;D  :P

Kuža moj črn je,
kratke tačke ima
in kadar se na sprehod poda,
umazane ima.

Kuža moj črn je,
kratke tačke ima
in kadar mu jih skopamo.
mokre in čiste ima.

Kuža moj črn je,
kratke tačke ima
in kadar se veselo igra,
najboljša prijatelja sva!

 :) (by little Littletune in second grade). not that anyone will understand but... it's a poem!  :P

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #5 on: January 28, 2012, 07:40:13 PM »
littletune whats it about? ;D
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #6 on: January 28, 2012, 07:46:39 PM »
littletune whats it about? ;D
My doggy! :)

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #7 on: January 28, 2012, 08:48:42 PM »
I made one of a dog. it's called the dog.

To the hill around the house.
creeping silently like a mouse.
Comes the dog to bark and howl.
Up the tree he sees an owl.
The moon is out it's time for bed.
here comes the dog to sleep in his shed.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #8 on: January 28, 2012, 08:55:34 PM »
Mary had a little bike
She rode it on the grass
Every time the wheel went round
The spokes went in her foot.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #9 on: January 28, 2012, 08:56:32 PM »
How old are you?

Nice poem old chap, but a bit short.

Is this an incomplete work??

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #10 on: January 28, 2012, 09:28:40 PM »
I did, but after have been fed the one below in "literature lessons" during my schoolperiod (long, long ago...), I decided my talents lay not here...

Entitled OOTE


Oote oote oote
Boe
Oote oote
Oote oote oote boe
Oe oe
Oe oe oote oote oote
A
A a a
Oote a a a
Oote oe oe
Oe oe oe
Oe oe oe oe oe
Oe oe oe oe oe
Oe oe oe oe oe oe oe
Oe oe oe etc.
Oote oote oote
Eh eh euh
Euh euh etc.
Oote oote oote boe
     etc.
     etc. etc.
Hoe boe boe boe
Hoe boe boe boe
B boe
Boe oe oe
Oe oe (etc.)
Oe oe oe oe
     etc.
Eh eh euh euh euh
Oo-eh oo-eh o-eh eh eh eh
Ah ach ah ach ach ah a a
Oh ohh ohh hh hhh (etc.)
Hhd d d
Hdd
D d d d da
D dda d dda da
D da d da d da d da d da da
     da
Da da demband
Demband demband dembrand dembrandt
Dembrandt Dembrandt Dembrandt
Doe d doe d doe dda doe
Da do do do da do do do
Do do da do deu d
Do do do deu deu doe deu deu
Deu deu deu da dd deu
Deu deu deu deu

            Kneu kneu kneu kneu ote kneu eur
            Kneu kneu ote kneu eur
            Kneu ote ote ote ote ote
            Ote ote ote
            Ote ote
            Boe
            Oote oote oote boe
            Oote oote boe oote oote boe
[/i][/size]Jan Hanlo (1912-1969)
In: ‘Roeping’, 28e jaargang, no. 3, jan-feb 1952.

I trust y'all are overwhelmed...

gep
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #11 on: January 28, 2012, 11:25:15 PM »
Looks slightly repetative
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #12 on: January 29, 2012, 12:00:37 AM »

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #13 on: January 29, 2012, 05:28:16 PM »
Tsk tsk, everybody is a critic....

Well, then, from the same poet (I have tried to make a translation from the original Dutch. Sadly, it lacks the originals colourfullness and thrust, but so as you get the idea. To be recited with expression, solemnly

THE SPARROW

Tcheep tcheep. Tcheep tcheep tcheep.
Tcheep tcheep tcheep. Tcheep tcheep.
Tcheep tcheep tcheep tcheep tcheep.
Tcheep tcheep tcheep. Tcheep

Tcheep.

                                     etc.


Now if anyone feels this to be rather, well, cheap, you are nothing but a barbarian!

all best,
gep
In the long run, any words about music are less important than the music. Anyone who thinks otherwise is not worth talking to (Shostakovich)

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #14 on: February 02, 2012, 07:51:50 PM »
I made one of a dog. it's called the dog.

To the hill around the house.
creeping silently like a mouse.
Comes the dog to bark and howl.
Up the tree he sees an owl.
The moon is out it's time for bed.
here comes the dog to sleep in his shed.

Did you like it? /\_/\
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Yes sure it's cute.  :)

Nice poem old chap, but a bit short.

Is this an incomplete work??

Thal

 ;D  ;D  ;D

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #15 on: February 02, 2012, 10:23:31 PM »
Thank you littletune your making me blush...;D
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #16 on: September 02, 2012, 10:07:25 PM »
  ;D  :P

Kuža moj črn je,
kratke tačke ima
in kadar se na sprehod poda,
umazane ima.

Kuža moj črn je,
kratke tačke ima
in kadar mu jih skopamo.
mokre in čiste ima.

Kuža moj črn je,
kratke tačke ima
in kadar se veselo igra,
najboljša prijatelja sva!

 :) (by little Littletune in second grade). not that anyone will understand but... it's a poem!  :P

So here is the melody for this ;D  :D just in case anyone wants to hear it  :P just don't forget... I was in second grade and that was a lot before I knew anything about music at all! (not that I know a lot now) :P
(I also had a recording of me singing it and a notebook where my mum wrote the notes, but I can't find it... so I just played it on my keyboard cause I still remember it exactly... not that there's anything difficult to remember  :P  :) )

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #17 on: September 02, 2012, 10:39:48 PM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #18 on: September 03, 2012, 12:29:16 PM »
Prepare for one of my glorious troll-comments-poems i post on youtube
Roses are red..
    Violets are blue..
    This poem has no rhyme..
     Microwave
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #19 on: September 04, 2012, 02:12:21 AM »
I've done a couple for English classes over the years.

As you can imagine, all of them were pretty crazy stupid outrageous poems.
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #20 on: September 04, 2012, 03:44:13 AM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #21 on: September 04, 2012, 05:29:29 AM »
I have more than enough trouble writing music...

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #22 on: September 04, 2012, 08:27:18 PM »
For some reason I can hear, in my head, you singing this.  Did you post yourself singing this before, or am I thinking of something else?

Thanks for listening Mayla! :) No I haven't posted it yet, because I can't find it, i can't even remember when was the last time I heard it... but it's really funny because I can hear myself singing too in my head now that I was thinking about it. Maybe you can hear the melody in my head!!!  :o  8) If I find that recording I will post it and then you can hear if you heard it that way!!  :) :)

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #23 on: September 04, 2012, 08:30:39 PM »
I have more than enough trouble writing music...

I think most of us already know this, but thanks for the reminder.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #24 on: September 04, 2012, 09:20:01 PM »
Here is my Viennese poem from when I was in Vienna.  Wolfi actually translated for me when we were at the Festival in Italy, one day.  Wolfi, if you didn't mind and it's OK, could you translate again, here?  Otherwise, I guess it's just here anyway.  

To know thyself is to be free ...

Und abder, ensiegnet und die fragen - entlich instil'ipzeich freund.  
Kantar die und auften zeigenfrautz,
entlich Zauber und Keinlichen auf.

Kriesten'lich, die Zauber ist wo strichten die auben,
staben Wiess.  Dir juntz ob die Fabder.
Liebe.

There are a few different sorts of words in this.
First there are words that are real German words in nowaday's world
Secondly there are words that sound a bit ancient, like from Middle High German or so.
Thirdly there are words that sound like German but who have no obvious meaning, but resemble very closely some German words.

First I'll go word by word and then I'll try to give an interpretation (basically the same I gave in Völs too)


Und: and
abder: that's almost a word=aber= but
ensiegnet: that's not an actual word but it resembles distictly the word "entsiegelt" which means "unsealed"

und die fragen: And the questions

entlich is a word, it's spelled a bit differently in modern German: endlich, and
 it means "finally"

instil'ipzeich: that's not a word I know but it sounds like Middle High German.

Freund: friend

Kantar:there I have an association with Spanish Cantar=to sing or German Kantor=a choir director

die und: who, and

auften: that could be spread into two words: auf den: on the

zeigenfrautz sounds like two melted words too:
zeigen: to show
frautz: that's not an actual word but it sounds a bit like the English word "fraud" and in German like Fritz, which is a Name. It resembles also the German word "Fratze" which means grimace, it is a very strong word in German, rather negative.

Entlich: like before: "finally"

Zauber. this word can be used in a very positive sense, like "this is magical" or "there's magic in it" or "enchantment" but it can also mean a spell. It depends on the context.


Keinlichen: that's not an actual word, but it resembles closely the adjektive "kleinlich" which means pedantic, fussy, nitpicky


auf: up

Kriestenlich. that's not an actual word but it resembles "christian" very closely
(Christlich, in ancient times also spelled Kristlich)

Zauber: like above

auben: may refer to the French river "Aube" or to the German word "Laube"
which means 'pergola' or 'alcove'. "Lauben" would just be the Plural.

staben

Wiess: if you change the place of two letters it's 'weiss'=white

Or it could relate to Wiese= meadow

Dir= to you (or you=dative)

juntz: that's not an actual word but it sounds quite a bit like "jauchzen" = to cheer, or jucken= to itch

ob: that's an ancient word for "above"

Fabder: this resembles 'Feder', which means feather or plume

Liebe=Love

I'll proceed to the interpretation tomorrow :)

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #25 on: September 04, 2012, 10:08:21 PM »
I think most of us already know this, but thanks for the reminder.
You're very welcome, although whether "most" people here did already know that is arguably open to question.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #26 on: September 04, 2012, 10:23:09 PM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #27 on: September 05, 2012, 06:55:17 PM »
There are a few different sorts of words in this.
First there are words that are real German words in nowaday's world
Secondly there are words that sound a bit ancient, like from Middle High German or so.
Thirdly there are words that sound like German but who have no obvious meaning, but resemble very closely some German words.

First I'll go word by word and then I'll try to give an interpretation (basically the same I gave in Völs too)

I very much enjoyed your breakdown of the words, Wolfi.  I look forward to your interpretation.  This poem is quite fascinating. :)
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #28 on: September 09, 2012, 12:50:02 AM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #29 on: September 09, 2012, 08:23:23 AM »
I want to try something just slightly bigger, I think, so I'm going to look through the forms and see what might be a good next step.

Your next step is a Shakespearean sonnet. :)  That's actually what I'd like to try next.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #30 on: September 09, 2012, 07:30:39 PM »
Post your poems Mayla. :D
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«Reply #31 on: September 09, 2012, 07:44:04 PM »
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«Reply #32 on: September 09, 2012, 08:09:59 PM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #33 on: September 10, 2012, 08:11:22 PM »
Here is my Viennese poem from when I was in Vienna.  Wolfi actually translated for me when we were at the Festival in Italy, one day.  Wolfi, if you didn't mind and it's OK, could you translate again, here?  Otherwise, I guess it's just here anyway.  

To know thyself is to be free ...

Und abder, ensiegnet und die fragen - entlich instil'ipzeich freund.  
Kantar die und auften zeigenfrautz,
entlich Zauber und Keinlichen auf.

Kriesten'lich, die Zauber ist wo strichten die auben,
staben Wiess.  Dir juntz ob die Fabder.
Liebe.




I'll proceed to the interpretation tomorrow :)

Well now is not "tomorrow", but of course I didn't forget it.

I first read this "on the fly" back then, later I focused on the single words in detail, and now I am going back to the "on the fly" mode again for my interpretation.

To me it seems all about breaking a "spell" and breaking boundaries.

Your "feather" (your voice, your message) is jumping with joy because you feel that an essential message, which has been hidden from many people for a long time, is now freely accessible for everybody, and it's just depending from ourselves to discover it, to delve freely into it, and take advantage of it.

Finally the spell is broken.

In the Stephansdom this secret is clearly visible, audible, perceivable, for everybody. The artists who built this cathedral have built it for everybody. You are happy that everybody can now see it, hear it, perceive it, you are happy because the truth is not anymore reserved for an elite minority, you are happy because you see clearly that we, as humans, have no limits to knowledge in the long run. We may have temporary limits to knowledge, but those will perish. :)

And this is, of course, resonating with your concept of true wisdom (Weisheit) and love (Liebe) :)


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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #34 on: September 10, 2012, 10:46:16 PM »
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«Reply #35 on: September 11, 2012, 12:40:19 AM »
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«Reply #36 on: September 13, 2012, 02:42:24 PM »
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«Reply #37 on: September 13, 2012, 07:13:11 PM »
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«Reply #38 on: September 13, 2012, 08:31:14 PM »
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«Reply #39 on: September 13, 2012, 08:46:15 PM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #40 on: September 13, 2012, 09:06:26 PM »
Well to me there has always been an intimate relationship between poetry and music. Poetry is like making music with words and music can be like making poetry with sounds. :)

maybe the best way to delve more into the depth of their common background is to compose songs?

After all some of Goethe's poems, as wonderful and perfect as they are per se, win even a lot more through Schubert's and other's music. :)

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #41 on: September 13, 2012, 09:57:18 PM »
There is a fine line between poetry and songwriting. this one is meant to be accompanied by with a Banjo. Probably the key of D. Hope y'all like it

Requiem for a Pet   

I'm having a problem with my pet
 a cute little dog named Scooter
he spends all day on the 'net
viewing porn on our computer
So I'm taking him down to the vet
where we'll have ol' Scooter nuetered

Oh poor Scooter , Oh poor Scooter

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #42 on: September 13, 2012, 10:19:18 PM »
Well to me there has always been an intimate relationship between poetry and music. Poetry is like making music with words and music can be like making poetry with sounds. :)

maybe the best way to delve more into the depth of their common background is to compose songs?

After all some of Goethe's poems, as wonderful and perfect as they are per se, win even a lot more through Schubert's and other's music. :)

I think what separates poetry styles and music styles the most is the rhythm and repetition. some music just cannot express a well written worded phrase and some poems just dont work as a song. Of course with a little adjustment to each , anything can be done.  It seems that earlier lyrics in operas or other forms did not emphasize rhyming like we do today.

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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #43 on: September 14, 2012, 08:13:39 AM »
Well, I'm reading my third Shakespeare Sonnet, and so far none of them actually follow the suggested form above ... perhaps Shakespeare's are not Petrarchan?  It probably says something about that somewhere in the Sonnet definition and I just didn't get there yet.  

Yes, the Petrarchan, or the Italian sonnet, differs from the Shakespearean.  In the Shakespearean the turn takes place in the next to last line.  You probably know that by now.  The Xenonian sonnet is even more exotic.  I have heard tales.


I'm just getting my head around it and I love the idea of the form.  I've thought I wanted to do some writing every morning, but that's not been the case, exactly (it's just not always going to happen).  And then I thought I wasn't allowed to write any more haikus, which I decided was dumb.  BUT, now I'm studying actual sonnets, at least in the tiniest bit, and so far I love it!

I'm glad you're excited! :)  I am really desiring to start a Shakespearean of mine own.
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #44 on: September 14, 2012, 10:56:28 PM »
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«Reply #45 on: September 15, 2012, 03:48:19 AM »
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«Reply #46 on: September 16, 2012, 09:08:32 PM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #47 on: September 17, 2012, 07:01:31 AM »
agh!  I just realized I might have done that "wrongly" ... I went abba abba, but I just assumed the second abba could have its own rhyme scheme in relation to itself ... but, is it supposed to be the same exact rhymes as the first abba?  

so like:

tree
cat
fat
bee
flea
brat
rat
tee

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Oui.  :)  I did a little research, and while the sestet scheme according to one site can be organized virtually any way you like of 2 or 3 rhyming sounds, the octave is set as abbaabba, the a's rhyming the same and the b's rhyming the same, as in your example above.  I checked a few Italian sonnets out as well.  But what you wrote is still a sonnet, just a Maylean variation of the Italian. :)

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«Reply #48 on: September 17, 2012, 02:22:43 PM »
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Re: Have you ever made a poem before?
«Reply #49 on: September 19, 2012, 07:40:35 AM »
The Sonata is connected to a Sonnet, yes?  I think I remember reading that.

I've wondered in the past if there is a connection between them.

I like!  I am looking forward to when/if you post a sonnet! :)  But no pressure.

I've had my English Literature Anthology out reading, getting the juices flowing.  
I'm pretty excited. :)  Keep the poetry coming. :)
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