Not sure if you still check this thread but regardig your last recording,
*It sounded way better, especially the beggining, but dude, please spend like 20 dollars on a decent mic, haha. The one you're using is extremely bad.
*Don't forget that on measure 17, there's a pp marking. The first note was very loud. Same thing goes for the calmato part. You played a bit too loud.
But it's indeed much better than the first recording. It'd be much easier to give some feedback with a decent mic, though. What is the piano you're using by the way?
Cheers, mate.